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p. 102 (top)

Riker: “Release the deflector!”
Suggest: “Full power to the deflector!” This would have the effect of pushing the
dense pocket of metreon gas toward the Son’a ships. If this still doesn’t work for
you, we can consider some alternatives...

p. 104 (bottom)
Ru’afo: “We’re going to detonate.”

Suggest: “We’re going to proceed with the gravitic implosion...”

p. 114 (bottom)

Son’a Officer 43: “Normal.”

Suggest: “Four point seven gigawatts.”

p. 115 (top)
Ru’afo: “... should be off the scale...”

Suggest: “... should be increasing exponentially...”

p. 115 (middle)

Ru’afo: “... the screen is working, the lights are on, life support is working...”

Suggest: the viewscreen is functional, artificial gravity is stable, life support is
working...”

That’s it for now. I’m still pondering how the Ba’Ku’s longevity might make them
more distinctive aliens. I’m heading to Mount Wilson Observatory for the night; we
can talk about any more tech changes / polishing tomorrow morning... Andre.

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